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Sorry for the obnoxious warnings. I'm quite a bit more secure in my sexuality another decade on! This story is about a girl who finds herself with a very unusual growth. That is, she has a penis. With this being my first CV story, I'd really like feedback. I hope you enjoy! Posted by Archangel 11 years ago Report.
Posted by Houyo 11 years ago Report. Posted by EveAra 11 years ago Report. Posted by Vorefreak 11 years ago Report. Posted by Thebob 11 years ago Report. Posted by Rhewin 11 years ago Report. Thanks to all of you for the positive feedback so far. Glad to know you guys like the story. I wasn't too sure how it turned out myself. Keep an eye out, I'll probably keep this character in reserve for a rainy day. Posted by gr8fzy1 11 years ago Report. Posted by Bitter 11 years ago Report. One thing I'd point out in the way of constructive criticism is that your tone is fairly clinical at the very beginning of the story.
Part of it is word choice; "hugely aroused" is an awkward phrase, and "engorged" is not a word that rolls well off the tongue.
The other part is cadence-- I notice a lot of quick, simple sentences that feel overly terse and informational more than passionate. It smoothed out once you got into the character interactions, however, and for the most part the writing is well-formed.
Thanks for writing this, and I look forward to what else you produce. Yeah, I see your point. I mostly write that way because I think that way. I want my readers to know exactly what I mean when I say something, hence the informative-style writing, but I could see how that might take away from one's experience. The character interactions are easier for me because I view it as relating a conversation rather than describing an event. I will definitely work on trying to smooth it out some. Like said, I write the way I think. What's the best way to describe this?
Well, in short, I get some sort of sadistic joy by bending the English language to a point in which it screams for mercy. Then, realizing just how badly I have harmed it, I let it unbend itself and the two of us go get a coffee while I apologize for my rude behavior. As it begins to forgive me, I slap it and call it a whore. Make sense? Needless to say, you don't want to read the unedited version of this. It is an unfortunate trait that I do try to suppress for the sake of my readers. Unfortunately I really do enjoy writing with unusual wording, so it's going to pop up from time to time.
Don't take me wrong, I deeply appreciate this kind of criticism as it keeps me grounded. But I write stories like this for myself, and they're going to sound the way I like them to sound. Posted by soulless chao 11 years Futa growth story Report. Posted by chargerse 11 years ago Report. This story is awesome. Please write more about Kelsey she is my favorite cock vore character ever.
Posted by Imrhys 11 years ago Report. I hold to the belief that there's nothing a good futa cock can't do. I'm glad to know you liked it so much :. To true sir. So please write more stories with huge futa cocks. Posted by dragon 11 years ago Report. I too, love this character and hope to read another story with hir in it. Posted by futavorelover 11 years ago Report. LOVE this story it's my all time fav futa cock vore story please make more.
Posted by Doom-Guy 10 years ago Report. Posted by LastRider 10 years ago Report. Posted by Julia 10 Futa growth story ago Report. It would NOT be better with a man. This was outright orgasmic, imho. Posted by shabbacabba 9 years ago Report. This cannot be the first time you wrote Futa growth story, its way too amazingly awesome!
Posted by Bookie 8 years ago Report. By far the best CV story I've ever read. Keep it up! Posted by VoreLover 7 years ago Report. I'm planning on turning this into a comic sometime in the future, is that okay? Posted by Rhewin 6 years ago Report. Posted by mallowsal 5 years ago Report. Posted by Valorie 1 month ago Report. Reply to this comment. Anonymous to read messages. Add to favorites Full Size Download.
The Growth By Rhewin -- Report. ed : 11 years ago Views :File size : Comment on The Growth. Please to post a comment. Posted by Archangel 11 years ago Report Great story. Loved it. Posted by Houyo 11 years ago Report Pretty awesome. Posted by EveAra 11 years ago Report Fun story! Posted by Vorefreak 11 years ago Report Awesome! Posted by Thebob 11 years ago Report Fantastic. Posted by Rhewin 11 years ago Report Thanks to all of you for the positive feedback so far. Posted by gr8fzy1 11 years ago Report Well written, looking forward to more!Futa growth story
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